Why, as a race, have we chosen to stop caring? People choose to go
through life chanting the mantra ''it is not my problem".

~period placed incorrectly outside the quotation marks

On Thu, 01 Jun 2006 00:37:17 GMT, Chuck <chuck@ufarley.com> wrote:

The sun rises and the sun sets
Time moves forward and life slows
I am here, yet I am not

~no periods

Thronging and shuffling about, paying no attention to the room around them.
Beggar in the corner, a man being mugged by the door.

~incomplete sentences

Why, as a race, have we chosen to stop caring? People choose to go
through life chanting the mantra ''it is not my problem".

~period placed incorrectly outside the quotation marks

I am so tired.

~a yawn of a revelation

In time, one can hope that we will return to ourselves. That what is
truly important will be important again.

~deep thoughts by Jack Handey

Faith, Family, and Friends.

family and friends should not be capitalized

Its all about me me me.

this is a % line, unoriginal

The mindless pursuit for wealth without cause is bad.

Al Gore sentiment, George Bush presentation

is because

this is unfortunate

I truly do not understand the fixation with watching
other peoples lives and not living our own.

people's missing apostrophe, word "truly" always awkward

We dedicate many hours of air time and countless lines of press
to evaluate why so-and-so did not win ''American Idol".

phrasing not bad, but period outside of quotation marks again - Taylor
Hicks is 50, he cheated

All this time we have millions of Americans with no health insurance,
school systems going broke, a Government that has lost touch with the
best interests of this nation. Of course, no one wants to hear about
that. It does not make us feel good. As long as you don't try to take
theirs it's OK.

government should not be capitalized, last sentence is unintelligible

Lord, I am so tired.

the overly dramatic "tired" theme, the short sentences, the lack of
substance in the buildup, the simple descriptions with child-like
adjectives and rudimentary grammar, I'm not engaged

In a moment of Lucidity it has become Somewhat clearer to me.

the lone big word feels out of place and ineffective and shouldn't be
capitalized...neither should "somewhat"

Sometimes. When Something is broken the only option is to tear it down
and start again. Kind of like the phoenix rising From the ashes. As I
sit here I have a much better understanding of things I thought I
would never understand. I understand now why people kill themselves.
It's all so simple. In the end when you strip it all away you are left
with ''why not". Most people do not have the capacity to understand.
And in most cases really don't want to understand. They have their own
problems and don't need to take on someone else's.

A valid attempt at the isolation of suicidal ideation, but the
capitals and grammar again, and lack of any real creativity or
originality. Develop a character, introduce me to a troubled soul,
show me aspects of his life that are vividly disturbing, make some
***** happen for *****'s sake.

I am so tired. Help Me

this is how I'm starting to feel

That is a sacrifice most if not any are willing to make.

it should read "few if any are willing to make"

It requires a truly selfless person

"truly" again

They simply have no clue what to do about it. If I am any example of
someone who is depressed, I simply want someone to understand.

The mental illness as a stigma angle is no longer a valid, or
interesting topic. More of my friends than not are on or have been on
some anti-depressant or anxiety medication.

Let me tell you an story. I can not remember a time in my life when I
was happy with who I was.

"a" not "an", sounds like Beverly Hillbillies theme song, "cannot,"
not "can not," "whom," not "who"

I am sorry Sue, I blamed this on you for years.

a fucking character emerges, a little late in the game though

watch lots of movies,

"lots" is worse than "truly"

I would go and spend money that I did not have in the hopes

"hope," not "hopes"

I had began to self destruct.

"begun," not "began"

Please email me when chapter 2 is complete. My sincerest apologies if
you're 8 in which case this is a masterpiece.